Revising with Williams

ENGL 387:
"Employment for pay in a business or industry chosen to provide practical experience in the use of English skills. Work experiences generally are alternated with full-time attendance at the University."

To provide practical experience in the use of English skills, students are employed for pay in a business or industry.

At the University, work experiences generally are alternated with full-time attendance.

The first sentence is ambiguous. I didn't know if 'chosen' refers to the student's choice in a business or industry, or the college's choice in a business or industry 'to provide practical experience'. The structure of the sentence as a description gives it an awkward beginning. My edit has removed the ambiguous nature by adding the subject of 'students' and removing the 'chosen'. The sentence retains its original meaning and the verbs match the subjects.

The second sentence reads better when rephrased to provide emphasis on the action of 'alternating full-time attendance'. Moving the phrase to the end of the sentence is the best course of action. The less important words, 'At the University' are moved to the left, as on page 68 of Williams. The sentence now has a strong ending that emphasizes full-time attendance. No slackers here.